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{{talkback|MTHarden|Week 4&5|ts=by [[User:MTHarden|MTHarden]] ([[User talk:MTHarden|talk]]) 04:39, 30 September 2011 (UTC)}}
==Week 6 Assignment from [[User:Nwitzofsky|Nwitzofsky]]==
I saw that you added the following sentences to the [[Trichophagia]] article:
"Trichophagia is mostly commonly found in adolescents and children. Appromixately five to eighteen percent of childern who have Trichotillomania (which is a skin picking disorder) also ingest hair as well. Thirty seven percent of childern who have Trichophagia and Trichotillamania have a chance of forming trichobezoar. Some of the side affects are loss of hair, stomach growth and vomiting."
The citation for this article looks correct, but you could add the date the article was written and revised ("Received May 27, 2004; revision received Oct. 8, 2004"). I found a few errors with your sentences. First, you stated that Trichotillomania is a "skin picking disorder" while the article states that it is recurrent hair pulling. I would change the word "skin" to "hair" so that it reads: Trichotillomania (which is a hair pulling disorder). Secondly, you have many spelling errors within your paragraphs. The word "children" is spelled wrong twice, once in the second sentence and again in the third sentence. "Approximately" is spelled wrong in the second sentence, and "Trichotillomania" is misspelled in the third sentence as well. Lastly, I would reword the last sentence and change "affects" to "effects."
--[[User:Nwitzofsky|Nwitzofsky]] ([[User talk:Nwitzofsky|talk]]) 03:29, 10 October 2011 (UTC)
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